IELTS Writing Sample
Advantages And Disadvantages of Increasing Tourism
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The costs of international travel are decreasing and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity in different countries?
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In recent decades, low cost airfare has made international travel easier and many countries have, therefore, developed their tourism industries into key sectors of their economies. While it is clear tourism brings obvious benefits to the countries that host tourists, it is also true to say it may bring disadvantages as well.
Undoubtedly, there are significant benefits that tourism brings to a country. First, a thriving tourist industry implies an increasing need for a variety of services such as hotels, transport, restaurants, and entertainment. This results in a considerable number of jobs being created for people who lack a college education and also the development of the infrastructure needed to accommodate visitors. Moreover, tourism is a "green" industry that, unlike factories, generates a low level of pollution. In fact, because beautiful natural landscapes are often places that tourists come to see, a country will often be sure to maintain the landscape in order to keep it attractive for tourists.
Despite the benefits, there are aspects of tourism that may prove harmful to a country. For instance, a country may suffer from the loss of their traditional culture. This is caused by people in a country changing their lifestyle, customs, and language in order to more effectively serve visitors or because they become influenced by foreign countries. This can cause stress in a traditional society and could even lead to animosity towards tourists. In addition, because tourists often carry expensive objects like cameras and are unaware of their surroundings, they make good targets for theft. Crime also increases as a result of the increases in drugs and prostitution that caters to some vacationers.
In summary, global tourism is greatly beneficial to an economy and environment of a country. However, it can be detrimental in several ways. To my way of thinking, a country should seek to develop its tourism industry because it can bring steady jobs to many people without their need for higher education and without the risk of environmental damages.
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IELTS Opinion Essays Advantages Disadvantages Essay
This critique is meant for the writing from weasel27193. This writing task has been reviewed and partially corrected. Please revert to the original IELTS writing before correction to understand this critique!
You were able to achieve the task by showing your own opinions on the pros and cons of increasing tourism activity.
Vocabulary is well thought and demonstrates your flexibility in using different constructs of English language.
+COHERENCE AND COHESION
Paragraphs are clearly organised.
+GRAMMATICAL RANGE AND ACCURACY
Compare to the original writing.
+ it's not wrong to say "traveling the world" in the introduction but it will sound more academic if it's replaced with "international travel". The same principle applies in the following phrases:
> "It cannot be denied that" -> "undoubtedly"
+ Your vocabulary and grammar skills are very good but they can be improved to be more academic, thereby raising your IELTS test results. Please check your edited essay to see the way your sentences are paraphrased.
+ "as a result of that increases": increases is plural, it's wrong to use "that".
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IELTS Writing: advantages & disadvantages essay
In this lesson you will learn how to produce a band 9 answer for advantages & disadvantages essay in IELTS Writing. As an example, we will use a topic of tourism in modern world. Basically, in all advantages and disadvantages essays your task is to describe positive and negative sides of a given topic + give your opinion.
In this lesson you will:
- see a question sample
- learn effective ways to quickly produce ideas for your answer
- learn band 9 answer structure
for advantages and disadvantages essay in IELTS.
IELTS advantages & disadvantages question sample
For example, you can get this question for IELTS writing task 2:
This essay topic is related to tourism. Of course, topics for questions will vary, but ideal answer structure is the same for all advantages & disadvantages essays in IELTS.
Producing ideas for your answer
Before you start writing your essay, you should always spend 1-2 minutes on producing ideas for your answer. This way, you’ll know what to write about and your answer will be more coherent and well-structured. In case of advantages & disadvantages essay, you need to think of 2-3 advantages and 2-3 disadvantages of the given issue.
Let’s think about advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world.
Advantages of tourism:
- boost in country’s economy due to increased spending
- new job opening for local people
- opportunities to discover new places for individual travelers
Disadvantages of tourism:
- destruction of popular tourist destinations by large numbers of tourists
- development of illegal economic activities
- local people can experience loss of privacy
Now, after we’ve collected some ideas, it’s time to use them in our essay.
Band 9 answer structure for causes & solutions essay
Though there are many ways to structure your IELTS essay, we’ll use this time-tested band 9 essay structure:
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
Tip: before starting to write your essay, decide what you think: does tourism have more advantages or disadvantages? You’ll need to make accent on your opinion in one of the body paragraphs.
We’ll use the opinion that tourism has more advantages.
Introduction Write the introduction in 2 sentences:
- Sentence 1 - paraphrase the question (restate the problem):
- Sentence 2 - tell the examiner what you’re going to describe in your essay:
Body paragraph 1 - advantages
- Sentence 1 - state 2 main advantages:
- Sentences 2-4 - explain the first advantage + give an example (if possible):
- Sentences 5-7 - explain the second advantage + give an example (if possible):
Body paragraph 2 - disadvantages
- Sentence 1 - state 2 main disadvantages:
- Sentences 2-4 - explain the first disadvantage + give an example (if possible):
- Sentences 5-7 - explain the second disadvantage + give an example (if possible):
- Sentences 8 - make an accent on your opinion (we’ll use the opinion that tourism has more advantages):
- Sentences 1-2 - briefly restate the advantages and disadvantages
- Sentence 2 - give your final opinion
Band 9 answer sample
Nowadays tourism generates a significant portion of national income for many countries, but it has certain drawbacks too. This essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of tourism and provide a logical conclusion.
The two main advantages of developed tourism industry are boost in country’s economy and a large number of new job openings for the local people. Firstly, tourists spend money on a wide range of services, including hotels, amusements, transportation, food and medical services. This way, tourism yields an additional income, greatly supporting the country’s economy. Secondly, tourism increases the level of employment by bringing new jobs. For instance, the influx of tourists results in a larger demand in restaurant workers, tour guides, hotel staff and employees of retail services, exhorting business owners to hire more people for these positions.
But tourism also has some major disadvantages like destruction of popular tourist destinations and development of illegal economic activities. іAncient buildings, temples and monuments struggle to cope with a vast amount of visitor’s traffic and get damaged. Also, the large number of tourists can cause environmental problems. For instance, when places of interest are overcrowded, natural resources often become overexploited. What’s more, the presence of a considerable number of tourists with a lot of money to spend, and often carrying valuables such as cameras and jewelry, increases the attraction for criminals and brings with it activities like robbery and drug dealing. However, proper hospitality management and correct usage of tourism revenue by the local government can eliminate these disadvantages.
To conclude, although tourism can have certain negative effects like destructive impact and growth of crime rate, it has an extremely positive influence on country’s economy and provides a large number of new jobs for the local people. I believe that these benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks.